Post by hayai1441 on Aug 25, 2007 21:35:47 GMT -5
There are plenty of things messed up with certain parts of Hayai's profile, so I would like to fix it. First off, one of the most important; the history. I would like to add to it, revealing a lot more about Hayai's past.
Current History:
((I obviously left out how he learned to fight, and where he learned his knowledge about heartless, keyblades, and stuff. The history above will be the same, I just might put it into different words.))
Improved History:
Ceel and Yuuka
A long time ago, there was a man by the name of "Yuuken". He wasn't very skilled with a blade, but carried one anyways. He was an explorer, who traveled to many different worlds. He has been to all of the worlds at least once, save a few. He seemed like an ordinary man to the naked eye, but he had a dark secret; he was attracted to animals.
It was his first time to the world "Where Tigers Roam", and after he stepped off the Gummi Ship is when he noticed an injured tiger. Succumbing to his twisted nature, he did some things to this injured tiger. Afterward, he acted as if none of it had happened, and nursed the very same tiger back to health. Though, the tiger never forgot what he had done to her; and she transformed into a young demon. The tiger's name was "Ceel", and she was very angry for what he had done to her; for she was going to have a daughter. Considering the fact that Yuuken seemed he would be a poor father, and the fact that se wanted revenge, she killed him with his own weapon.
Many weeks later, she bore her daughter. Never wanting to forget her hatred for pure humans, she named the child "Yuuka". Yuuka lived in the wilderness of "Where Tigers Roam", and learned many necessary skills for survival. Despite the freedom they had in the wilderness, Yuuka longed to live in civilization. But whenever she brought it up, Ceel scolded her and changed the subject.
By the time she was at the age of twelve, she escaped demonic mother and started a new life in the town a few leagues from where they had lived.
From there, her daily ritual became begging for food or money, and eating from the trash. By the age of fourteen, she was lucky enough to be taken in by a kind old woman named "Ruth".
For the next few years she stayed with Ruth, until she met Kasan, a young man whom she soon fell in love with.
After two years, they got married, and moved into a small house on the single road separated the only two towns of their world.
Shortly after moving in, Ceel appeared, and was very upset for Yuuka's choices. Though after a long discussion, Ceel reluctantly accepted the fact that her daughter had married a human male. Soon after, Yuuka had become pregnant with her first son, Hayai.
Hayai's Childhood
During the first few years of his life, Hayai was a very curious child. He would always try to climb things, or attempt to eat uneatable items. He was unnaturally speedy for his age, which always gave his father, Kasan, a hard time watching him. By the time he was five, Yuuka was pregnant again, and everyone was excited. Ceel, his grandmother, even went to the trouble of staying in their household to help with the second child. She was kind to the young Hayai and pregnant Yuuka, but was still irritable to Kasan.
After many weeks, she gave birth to a second son, Kuik. Just like Hayai, Kuik was unnaturally fast for his age as well. They would always get into mayhem, and Ceel would have to step in to settle them down.
Now Hayai was eight, and Kuik was two. At this time, Hayai was helping to raise Kuik in all the ways he could, and even tried to be a good role-model to the toddler. Kuik would always end up copying Hayai, and Hayai enjoyed every bit of it. This is also when Kasan started to home-school Hayai. Hayai's days were filled with learning while Kuik's was filled with childish mischief.
The next major event happened when Hayai was thirteen, and Kuik was seven. For the very first time in Where Tigers Roam, heartless appeared. It was late in the afternoon, and the sun had already set; Hayai was playing with Kuik out in a nearby field. Suddenly, a pool of darkness appeared under the young boy's feet, and hands sprouted from below. It grabbed a hold of Kuik's ankles, and dragged him down. After that, several shadows appeared around the frightened Hayai; and he would of been gotten to, lest Ceel had not rescued him.
The entire family was sullen for the next few months at the loss of Kuik. Kasan always had his head down when he was doing his work. Yuuka always cried when she saw Hayai (The two sons held a striking resemblance). Ceel seldom visited their home. Of course, this didn't help Hayai, who had nightmares of the dark creatures who stole Kuik away.
At this time, Kasan teached the teenage Hayai about manners, and respect. Though with what was going on, only a bit of the lesson reached Hayai. Though the lesson had reached him enough for him to gain a distaste for disrespectful behavior.
When Hayai was fifteen, all of the sadness and trauma was a thing of the past, and his family forgot all about Kuik. Though Hayai still had the occasional nightmare about a nameless boy being slain by dark monsters. It was this time, that Ceel had taken Hayai into the wilderness,, where she taught Hayai many things. Like how to fish, hunt, start a fire, and how to defend himself. She gave him a fallen branch to use as a sword, and they would do battle. Though Hayai seemed to get worse with each fight, to the point where he threw away the mangled branch. Taking a different approach, Ceel decided to teach Hayai to fight in hand-to-hand combat. This time, he had actually done pretty well, and his skill increased over the weeks.
Finally, Hayai was up to par with his Grandmother and her blade, and not a day too soon. The heartless appeared a second time, and in greater numbers. Though with the combined efforts of him and Ceel, they dispatched the creatures. Hayai soon made the realization that the creatures were not of this world, but were like aliens. Going to the town's library, he researched all he could about other worlds, even children's books. All he could learn about though was the fact that there were more than one world, and there were ways to reach them. It wasn't until a magician moved into town that Hayai had the means of transportation. He wanted to put his skill and demonic powers to good use, and to make sure no one else was taken by the foul creatures.
So after a long discussion with his family, they said their good-byes and the magician summoned a portal for Hayai to go through.
Over the next two years, Hayai had gone from world to world via portals or hitch-hiking, and on every world, learned more about the heartless. Though it wasn't until he visited the library in Hollow Bastion that he had learned about a weapon called the "KeyBlade" and the black creature's true names; heartless. There was even a book covering the topic of nobodies. Hayai couldn't understand the sentences and their hidden meanings besides the few in the beginning. This only taught him about how they were made, and nothing else...
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I would like for you to replace the two paragraph history with this, as it covers so much more. This explains why he fights the heartless, how he knows about them and the keyblades, and how he learned to fight. This should be better than that short history I made at the beginning.
Also, my spell check button is not working, so I used the spell and grammer check on Microsoft Works Word Processor, so if the name of it's function is true, then the grammer should be fine as well.
Also, at the bottom of his profile, in the "other" section, you should see how he likes soap operas, and the little "edit" segment in there. Would you mind removing all of that please?
Thank you.
Current History:
Hayai's grandfather was a man named Yuuken. He was a simple swordsman; but was into bestiality. On one of his adventures he encountered an injured tiger. The next day he began to nurse the tiger back to health. Two weeks later, when the tiger was once again healthy, it took it's true form; a demon. Apparently it had become pregnant and didn't see Yuuken as a suitable father, so the demon murdered him.
The demon gave birth to his mother, and eventually she gave birth to Hayai. His family inhabited a small world; and there wasn't much of an education system there. So Hayai was home-schooled. During the next nine years, the boy was raised at home. This is where he learned manners and gained his dislike for blatant disrespect. Though Hayai wanted much more in life. He wanted to put his demonic abilities to good use; thus he embarked on his own journey. He has been gone from his home world for two years now.
The demon gave birth to his mother, and eventually she gave birth to Hayai. His family inhabited a small world; and there wasn't much of an education system there. So Hayai was home-schooled. During the next nine years, the boy was raised at home. This is where he learned manners and gained his dislike for blatant disrespect. Though Hayai wanted much more in life. He wanted to put his demonic abilities to good use; thus he embarked on his own journey. He has been gone from his home world for two years now.
((I obviously left out how he learned to fight, and where he learned his knowledge about heartless, keyblades, and stuff. The history above will be the same, I just might put it into different words.))
Improved History:
Ceel and Yuuka
A long time ago, there was a man by the name of "Yuuken". He wasn't very skilled with a blade, but carried one anyways. He was an explorer, who traveled to many different worlds. He has been to all of the worlds at least once, save a few. He seemed like an ordinary man to the naked eye, but he had a dark secret; he was attracted to animals.
It was his first time to the world "Where Tigers Roam", and after he stepped off the Gummi Ship is when he noticed an injured tiger. Succumbing to his twisted nature, he did some things to this injured tiger. Afterward, he acted as if none of it had happened, and nursed the very same tiger back to health. Though, the tiger never forgot what he had done to her; and she transformed into a young demon. The tiger's name was "Ceel", and she was very angry for what he had done to her; for she was going to have a daughter. Considering the fact that Yuuken seemed he would be a poor father, and the fact that se wanted revenge, she killed him with his own weapon.
Many weeks later, she bore her daughter. Never wanting to forget her hatred for pure humans, she named the child "Yuuka". Yuuka lived in the wilderness of "Where Tigers Roam", and learned many necessary skills for survival. Despite the freedom they had in the wilderness, Yuuka longed to live in civilization. But whenever she brought it up, Ceel scolded her and changed the subject.
By the time she was at the age of twelve, she escaped demonic mother and started a new life in the town a few leagues from where they had lived.
From there, her daily ritual became begging for food or money, and eating from the trash. By the age of fourteen, she was lucky enough to be taken in by a kind old woman named "Ruth".
For the next few years she stayed with Ruth, until she met Kasan, a young man whom she soon fell in love with.
After two years, they got married, and moved into a small house on the single road separated the only two towns of their world.
Shortly after moving in, Ceel appeared, and was very upset for Yuuka's choices. Though after a long discussion, Ceel reluctantly accepted the fact that her daughter had married a human male. Soon after, Yuuka had become pregnant with her first son, Hayai.
Hayai's Childhood
During the first few years of his life, Hayai was a very curious child. He would always try to climb things, or attempt to eat uneatable items. He was unnaturally speedy for his age, which always gave his father, Kasan, a hard time watching him. By the time he was five, Yuuka was pregnant again, and everyone was excited. Ceel, his grandmother, even went to the trouble of staying in their household to help with the second child. She was kind to the young Hayai and pregnant Yuuka, but was still irritable to Kasan.
After many weeks, she gave birth to a second son, Kuik. Just like Hayai, Kuik was unnaturally fast for his age as well. They would always get into mayhem, and Ceel would have to step in to settle them down.
Now Hayai was eight, and Kuik was two. At this time, Hayai was helping to raise Kuik in all the ways he could, and even tried to be a good role-model to the toddler. Kuik would always end up copying Hayai, and Hayai enjoyed every bit of it. This is also when Kasan started to home-school Hayai. Hayai's days were filled with learning while Kuik's was filled with childish mischief.
The next major event happened when Hayai was thirteen, and Kuik was seven. For the very first time in Where Tigers Roam, heartless appeared. It was late in the afternoon, and the sun had already set; Hayai was playing with Kuik out in a nearby field. Suddenly, a pool of darkness appeared under the young boy's feet, and hands sprouted from below. It grabbed a hold of Kuik's ankles, and dragged him down. After that, several shadows appeared around the frightened Hayai; and he would of been gotten to, lest Ceel had not rescued him.
The entire family was sullen for the next few months at the loss of Kuik. Kasan always had his head down when he was doing his work. Yuuka always cried when she saw Hayai (The two sons held a striking resemblance). Ceel seldom visited their home. Of course, this didn't help Hayai, who had nightmares of the dark creatures who stole Kuik away.
At this time, Kasan teached the teenage Hayai about manners, and respect. Though with what was going on, only a bit of the lesson reached Hayai. Though the lesson had reached him enough for him to gain a distaste for disrespectful behavior.
When Hayai was fifteen, all of the sadness and trauma was a thing of the past, and his family forgot all about Kuik. Though Hayai still had the occasional nightmare about a nameless boy being slain by dark monsters. It was this time, that Ceel had taken Hayai into the wilderness,, where she taught Hayai many things. Like how to fish, hunt, start a fire, and how to defend himself. She gave him a fallen branch to use as a sword, and they would do battle. Though Hayai seemed to get worse with each fight, to the point where he threw away the mangled branch. Taking a different approach, Ceel decided to teach Hayai to fight in hand-to-hand combat. This time, he had actually done pretty well, and his skill increased over the weeks.
Finally, Hayai was up to par with his Grandmother and her blade, and not a day too soon. The heartless appeared a second time, and in greater numbers. Though with the combined efforts of him and Ceel, they dispatched the creatures. Hayai soon made the realization that the creatures were not of this world, but were like aliens. Going to the town's library, he researched all he could about other worlds, even children's books. All he could learn about though was the fact that there were more than one world, and there were ways to reach them. It wasn't until a magician moved into town that Hayai had the means of transportation. He wanted to put his skill and demonic powers to good use, and to make sure no one else was taken by the foul creatures.
So after a long discussion with his family, they said their good-byes and the magician summoned a portal for Hayai to go through.
Over the next two years, Hayai had gone from world to world via portals or hitch-hiking, and on every world, learned more about the heartless. Though it wasn't until he visited the library in Hollow Bastion that he had learned about a weapon called the "KeyBlade" and the black creature's true names; heartless. There was even a book covering the topic of nobodies. Hayai couldn't understand the sentences and their hidden meanings besides the few in the beginning. This only taught him about how they were made, and nothing else...
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I would like for you to replace the two paragraph history with this, as it covers so much more. This explains why he fights the heartless, how he knows about them and the keyblades, and how he learned to fight. This should be better than that short history I made at the beginning.
Also, my spell check button is not working, so I used the spell and grammer check on Microsoft Works Word Processor, so if the name of it's function is true, then the grammer should be fine as well.
Also, at the bottom of his profile, in the "other" section, you should see how he likes soap operas, and the little "edit" segment in there. Would you mind removing all of that please?
Thank you.
I did post in shades of grey if anyone even remembers that lmao