Zane Donovan

[Konaa]

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Username: Konaa

Gender: Male

Other Character(s): Konaa

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Name: Zane Donovan

Alias: The Messiah of Rock

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Race: Human

Alignment: Neutral

Origin: Traverse Town
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Appearance:

Physical Features: Zane is a thin, tall boy with strong arms. he does look a bit gangly, though.

Facial Features: Most of the time his eyes are hidden by his sandy bangs. However, they shine bright green when revealed. His hair is incredibly messy.

Clothing: He usually dresses in a sandy-colored trenchcoat, with a black shirt underneath. All he has for pants are jeans.

Miscellaneous Items/Articles: He does have a pair of small glasses. He has an earring on his left ear that is shaped like a star, with a three small drops of water hanging from it.

Personality:

Resolve: Zane is driven by his desire for fame. He wants everyone in the galaxy to know the name Zane Donovan!

Pursuit: Even he doesn't know.

Fears: Zane is afraid of one thing: Fading away into obscurity.

Hopes: He wants everyone in the galaxy to know and love his music. forming a band would be pretty nice, too.

Hobbies: Music, music, more music. Zane isn't just a rocker, he can play any genre.

Public Personality/Private Personality: Zane is charming, over the top, and WAY too enthusiastic. He tackles problems head on. When he's performing, he's your typical rocker. Screaming out to the audience, riling them up to enjoy themselves. Zane is almost never angry, and is never shaken from his sight of ultimate fame. Unlike most rockers, he's not that much of a womanizer. In private, Zane is quieter, and a bit more timid. Otherwise, he's mostly the same, wacky guy.
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Class: Mage

Weapons: His weapon is his instrument. A rock `n roll guitar.

Weapon Name: none

Weapon Description: His guitar is purple, in color, with a silver head. On the back, an emblem matching his earring is printed.

Unique Notes: Zane uses it to channel his powers./blockquote]

Abilities:

Base Ability:Guitar Magic

Sub Abilities:
-Rock on!: Zane completely rocks out, sending out damaging soundwaves at his opponent. However, the soundwaves only travel in a cone some ways forward. If you're to the side or behind him you'll be missed completely.
-Shielding Melody: Zane plays a calm tune that summons a barrier around him, usually good for blocking one direct attack.
-Ballad of Illusions: Zane plays a deceiving tone, creating an illusion of there being more then one of him.

Items: [This section is only to be touched by staff. We will be putting any items that you have bought in this area. Items are a one-time use thing. Once you use them in the RP, they'll be removed from this section.]

Equips: [Equips that you have attained through buying/winning them and then are equipped are within here. Remember, only 3 at a time.]

Distribution Points:

Physical Attack: 1
Physical Defense: 3
Magical Attack: 4
Magical Defense: 3
Reflexes: 2
Speed: 2
Awareness: 1

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History: An orphan, Zane grew up on the relatively safe streets of traverse town. As he sat on the side and watched the travelers come and go, the musicians caught his eye the most. Music was his only real interest. Upon befriending an old guitarist, he learned how to play from him. Soon enough, though, his skill expanded. More and more flocked to his shows, and his popularity was exploding. The feeling of fame, that knowing countless eyes were on him...That was the best feeling in the world for him. It had it his goal then and there. He would become the most famous musician in history, or die trying.
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Anything else you want to say about yourself or your character?

[~/\The Dragon Writer/\~]

The only real problem is that your abilities seem to be too overpowering. There's nothing wrong with the soundwaves one, but the drowsiness one, as well as the illusion one, need some editting.

First of all, you need to have some range of attack so they're all avoidable. We can't have the abilities impossible to dodge, especially since soundwaves are somewhat...well...they travel far.

Second of all, for the drowsiness one, it sounds like it'd be a stat modifier, so I'm going to have to ask you to change the ability completely.

Third of all, the illusion one is fine, but the illusions can only remain that, illusions. That means they can't attack at all, nor can they physically contact the opponent.

[Konaa]

Requested edits made, DW.

[~/\The Dragon Writer/\~]

Alright, everything looks alright now.

~Accepted~

Locked.