Namine, The Memory Artist

[Homac]

Username: Homac
Current canons: Demyx, Ratix
Canon you're auditioning for: Namine
Media canon is from: KH:CoM, KH2
Is the current canon taken?: No.
Audition post (400 words):_______________________________
Namine hung another picture on the wall, smiling to herself as she did. The wall in question was covered in these, all on plain paper drawn with colored pencils, all of the same people: a brown haired boy, a duck, a dog, a mouse, a brown haired girl, and a silver haired boy.

Namine took time to look over all the pictures she'd drawn. She'd been drawing ever since she'd found herself somehow outside Kairi's heart and in this small town.

"Those are very nice, Namine." The blond nobody jumped slightly in suprise as Anna, the woman who had let her stay here, came up behind her silently.

"Ah, thank you. I think that they're easy drawings though, nothing special." The pictures actually brought back memories of the time she'd spent in Castle Oblivion, when she'd been made to manipulate Sora and his friends. She then mentally shook her head, she didn't want to think of that now, or at all if she didn't have to.

The older woman shook her head, "Nonsense. Who are the people in the pictures?"

At this question, Namine smiled, thinking about the subjects of the pictures, "They're friends. Dear friends who I haven't seen in a while." It was true. While she was still inside Kairi's heart, Sora and Riku had run off again, and the King, Donald, and Goofy had gone with them. Neither Kairi, nor her nobody had seen them for months.

Anna glared at the young woman who had become lost in her own memories, "Well, if you haven't seen them, why don't you go look for them? They'll probably be glad to see you."

Namine blinked at this thought, wondering how it hadn't come up before in the month she had spent here. 'She's right,' Namine thought, 'since I left Kairi's heart, all I've done is stay here and draw about them. Why didn't I think about going to find them myself?'

She found the answer herself a minute after the question had been asked, 'I don't know... Maybe it's because I was simply waiting for them to find me, like the last time. But can I really do that now? I don't even think they know that I exist outside of Kairi. No... I'll have to find them this time. This time, I'm the one who will fufill the promise to meet again.'

Namine silently turned to her things, her notepad, colored pencils, clothes, and then said while beginning to pack,"You're right. I made a promise that we'd meet again, so I guess it's my turn to keep that promise, rather than the other way around. Thank you for your hospitality, but I have to be going now."

Anna smiled to herself, she'd known that girl had something important to do. After all, girls don't normally appear out of nowhere without a purpose.

As Namine finished packing her things into a small bag and taking the pictures off the wall, she turned back to Anna. "Here," she said, handing the older woman the drawings she'd made during her time there, "I'd like you to have these. Espescially the one on the bottom." The one on the bottom was a picture she'd made specially. It was a picture of Anna's son, who had left home at some time and hadn't returned.

Then, the small nobody in white left the town to search for her friends once again, with one final thought on her mind.

'I hope your son Lloyd can find his way back too, Anna. We all need the light someone else can give us in out life.'

[High's .Valentine.]

Interesting.

Wow, you're pretty good, honestly. This was definitely better than I had expected.

Except...I just get this feeling that there need to be more. You know, a lot more. I got the gist of her personality, but I need you to dive deeper. Everything is there and accurate, but you seem to spend a few seconds on each topic and it leaves me...ya know wishing there's more. The audition needs a more tangible personality. At the moment, it's still not good enough. Maybe some more info on how she managed to separate from Kairi. Also, there's always this melancholy feeling about Namine that is missing here. She knows she's a nobody, she knows she's special, she's been bullied by the Organization. It's something pitiable that really sets her apart from Kairi's bolder actions. She's very delicate looking, and frail probably too. Which you expressed, but didn't really go into. I also thought the transition from passive to active was way too rushed. It'd be nice to work more on the inner conflict of that moment.

So...I think I'm not going to pass judgment. I like the audition, but it's not enough for me. Others might feel differently, of course. Just giving you some input here.

[Rhea]

This really isn’t a bad audition, but there’s just not enough. Remember that your goal is to prove you can play Naminé, you’re not just writing a normal post. I feel like there’s potential here, but you need to explain more, go deeper into the character. Even without blatantly saying it, you should express what she’s thinking and feeling. Everything in your audition was brief and unexpanded, she’s looking at drawings, then she’s speaking to the woman, then she’s leaving Twilight Town to find her friends. Slow down and tell us what’s going on in Naminé’s mind. She’s docile and gentle, but when she’s determined about something she becomes fervent and stubborn; after being manipulated by Marluxia she decides that she doesn’t want to be a puppet, and she won’t harm Sora even if it means dieing. In your audition this trait could have been shown – she’s waited patiently for their return, but now she’s given the chance and she’s going to find those people who are important to her. You touched on this trait, but like I keep saying there’s so much more you could have done with it.

So for this one I’ll have to say 1/2 Denied.

[Homac]

I'm gonna edit this tomorrow.
*smirks*
Be ready to change that decision, okay Rhea?


08/21/09 12:29 pm: Edited, kinda. I had better stuff down, but my computer froze up and I lost it. I hope this okay.

[High's .Valentine.]

Ya know, Homac...I didn't think it was really fair that you edited the audition after Rhea denied it. :\ I mean usually, if you wanted to edit the audition, doing so before she made a decision would be how you wanna do that.

I'm going to lock this audition. I want you to make the edits you want to make to the audition or start over or do whatever you wanna do and post up a new one again. Also, I don't want you to do this again, OK?

LOCKED.