Irvine Kinneas

[angelous]

Username: Angelus
Current canons: Vivi, Doofenshmirtz, Roxas, Goofy, Merlin
Canon you're auditioning for: Irvine
Media canon is from: Final Fantasy 8
Is the current canon taken?: nope, surprisingly
Audition post (400 words):

Irvine had been napping out on the ground only an hour or so away from where he had hoped to go. Sure it wasn't that long of a journey before he had stopped, but it wasn't like he was in any rush. After all, it had been some time since he had seen Squall last, it's not like another hour or two would kill the guy.

Not that he knew Irvine was on his way of course. What would be the fun in that? Squall may or may not admit it when he would see his old comrade, but he would without a doubt (at least in his mind) be glad to see his old fighting partner, and orphanage buddy (though if Squall even remembered that wasn't likely).

Irvine sat up, and then proceeded to stand up. Once he had done so, he had begun to stretch his arms and legs. As a expert marksmen his arms had to be stretched and ready to go, especially considering the fact the gun he would carry wasn't always light. And well, he had his legs ready in case he needed to run (as had been the case only a few times before, and those targets were anything but ordinary). As soon as he was ready to leave, a few Heartless had appeared.

Now Irvine was no idiot (as he had fought and bested many of these creatures before, and was around when everyone learned of them), but these three Heartless seemed cute to him, in a demented, heart stealing sort of way. But just because he thought that didn't mean he wasn't going to shoot them. In fact he already had his favorite gun loaded and pointed.

"Sorry about this little ones, but a Heartless is a Heartless, no matter how big, or tough." He fired off three shots, and vanquished them all. He turned away, and as he did, he came face to face with ten Neo-Shadows. He checked to see how much ammo he had. And aside from the single shot left in his gun, well, he was out.

"If only more places sold ammunition." Irvine grinned. "Time to show them what a true marksman can do!" He ran to the side of the Heartless, who had just sprung into action. As he lined up with eight of them, he pulled the trigger, and the last bullet he had fired out from the gun. And instead of only taking out one like it normally would've, it took out all eight, leaving two more behind. He looked at them, then looked around. If only there was some way he could take care of these things without having to get near the town.

The appearance of ten more Neo-Shadows quickly put an end to that idea. He laughed anxiously, and began to back away.

"Not that I don't want to stay and play guys, but I'm out of ammo, and y'all look mighty hungry." He smiled nervously. "And I'm not sure I like what's on your menu." And with that he took off in a dead sprint toward town. The Heartless followed him, but fortunately his years of experience in running away from small fry (he'd never confirm this if Leon asked of course, at least not with ladies around) paid off, and he managed to outrun them. He ended up in the marketplace, and well, there were ladies. Not many of course, but they were attractive enough to get his attention. He walked up to one.

"Hello there miss. Has anyone arrested you lately, 'cause it has to be a crime for you to look that good."

SMACK

"Jerk."

Irivin rubbed his face. "What I thought that was a rather nice compliment!" He cried out to her. He sighed. Today just wasn't his day. First he had to run away from a fight (which in retrospect was only the result of him not being prepared like he should have been), and then a woman had deemed one of his lines inappropriate or some such nonsense and smacked him. Hopefully Leon would treat his old friend better. But first things first. He walked over to a nearby shop, where he could buy ammo.

"Excuse me shop-keep. I'll take all the ammo you got."

"Your price comes to 3600 Munny."

Irvine checked his wallet. He had 1600.

"Actually how much could I get for 1600?"

The shopkeeper frowned, and put the excess ammo away. Irivine paid, and then proceeded to Merlin's house. He opened the door, and smiled once he saw Leon.

"Hey there Leon! How's it going?" He turned and saw Yuffie, Aerith, and Tifa. He walked up to them, put his arms around Aerith and Tifa and tried to work his magic.

"Why hello there ladies! What are three beautiful women like you doing with a bunch of die hard fighters like Leon and Cid?" Leon smiled, and shook his head. And then came the part Irvine hadn't been expecting.

SMACK

He didn't see who had done it, but from the pain that he was feeling, he could've sworn all three had hit him at once. After the three girls left, Irvine walked over to Leon.

"Today just isn't my day. Say you have any Munny you can loan an old friend? I'm out and I need to buy some more ammo."

Leon put his hand to his face and shook his head.

"What? It's for a good cause! Unless you'd rather I put it on the RGRC's tab."

Leon shook his head some more.

"Oh come on Leon!" Irvine got on his knees and quickly scuttled over to Leon, hands up in a begging position.

"Please?"

Leon shook his head. Irvine scuttled to the right.

"Pretty please?"

Leon refused again. So Irvine scuttled to the left.

"Oh come on you owe me! Heck if I have to I'll work for it!" Leon looked at him and nodded. Irvine stood up, let loose a cry of victory, and then gasped. He pulled out a letter.

"Oh yeah, this is for you Leon. From you know who!" He handed Leon the letter, which was the whole reason he'd even journeyed back to town to begin with.

"Now don't go getting all kissy face on me when you two see each other again you hear! At least not unless you can hook me up with someone. My luck with the ladies isn't doing so good right now." Leon laughed.

Irvine had to admit, despite the fact that he had been smacked a few times, had to run away from some Heartless, and the fact that he had to leave a nice peaceful place to come back home, just to deliver a letter; he was glad to be home.

OOC: I took some creative liberties with this audition, incorporating a hint of Final Fantasy Eight, as well as implying that Irvine had been around during Hollow Bastion's fall and the like. I thought it made it seem like a rather nice, if not interesting audition, perhaps even one of my better ones.

That's not meaning that some of my auditions were bad right?

RIGHT?

Lie to me.

=P

[Ryu-star!]

Alrighty. First audition. [ cracks knuckles ]

I gotta say, this is a tough one. I think you're well on your way to understanding Irvine's character. Well on your way, but... sadly, not quite there yet. Sure, he's a ladies man. You got that part. And sure, he's a bit cocky. You got that part down too. But, in my opinion, he isn't quite as shallow as you're making him appear. Sure, he likes the ladies, but I just don't think you quite showed that right. If that makes any sense?

Another thing that kinda bugged me was that it was all over the place. I get that you were probably trying to get the chance to show off a wide range of emotions. And I think you accomplished that. But I think that the spontaneous change of not only location, but emotion kind of took away from the overall audition. Take the beginning, for instance. You could have done without the fight scene. The emotions you showed there could have easily been fit into the later scenes. Heck, they were.

Anyway, with all that said, I’m unfortunately going to have to deny this. I hate to do it, but just let me say that you really shouldn’t give up hope. You’re close. So feel free to try again. =3.

[angelous]

I respect your decision, but there really wasn't any change in location, this all took place on Radiant Garden, it was just him going from point A to point B in it. Just thought I'd point that out.

[Ryu-star!]

My mistake.

Even so, when I read it, it came off as though the location was changing. So that was what I was basing my statement on, even if that wasn't actually what you intended.

[Beaver Dude]

Hmmm, I think what Ryu's getting at is that you're a little focused on externals - appearance, monologue, setting. It detracts from the 'realism' (yeah. You have permission to shoot me for mentioning realism on a KH forum) of your audition. There's a lot of action here that Irvine doesn't really react to except in a superficial manner and it, well, it makes him appear a bit two-dimensional. You have a good, I'd even say very good, grasp of how he acts, but there's not much that I can make out about how he thinks. Now don't take this as encouragement to go all hell-bent into flashback mode but keep it mind. To use a cooking metaphor: you've got the dish down pat - all you need is the flavoring.

Admittedly, the FF series I'm the most unfamiliar is FFXII quickly followed by FFVIII so I'm not going to deny this one. Just going to point out what I think is the main weakness in the audition.

[yami]

I'd like to pause the vote / deny on this audition just for a bit.

Stealth Edit? Okay perhaps not, anyway:

If you please Angy, I'd like you to do a one more albeit mini audition. I'm going to give you a scenario, roleplay this out to the best of your abilities. Then we can go vote/deny, sounds good?

Scenaro:

Irvine has returned to Radiant Garden, he's stuck at Merlin's place with Sora, till Leon returns. Roleplay it out (need not be too long, 400 words give or take).

[angelous]

Well this was a rather unusual change of pace for Irvine. He was usually the one out and about town, doing whatever mission that the RGRC had sent him on. This time around however, it was quite the opposite. Leon had decided that it was high time he go out and do something. And that something happened to be going to the grand opening of Seventh Heaven, a newly built inn and pub. Which left Irvine back at Merlin's house, which also served at the RGRC headquarters. At first Irvine had been irritated at the fact that he wouldn't be getting the chance to hit on the various women that would no doubt be attending the ceremony, but then he realized one crucial detail.

Merlin and Cid were going to be there, and at the same time. Them being in a single place at the same time usually spelt disaster for either the place, or the people who were at said place. So in light of this fact he decided that he was probably better off. Assuming that the two didn't behave themselves. He'd be honest if asked, Merlin and Cid were both good people, in fact to Irvine, they were like family (as was Leon). But that little feud about which was better, magic or technology made it rather hard to be too friendly to one or the other, at least while the one he was not being particularly friendly to at the time was around. He dismissed these gloomy thoughts however, and decided to pursue the more gleeful ventures of his mind. And so he did. For about five minutes.

"Man oh man did Leon ever pick a time to do some work! I'd give just about anything to watch those two old coots bicker about which of their loves was better." Of course he really didn't want to see the two fight yet again, but truth be told, the names and threats they flung at one another did tend to get rather humorous at times. His legs began to burn from lack of use, so he hopped up off the chair he was sitting in (at which time it fell over from the sudden movement), and started to walk around. Mere moments later a teen walked in. Irvine looked him over. He realized the kid couldn't be more than 16 or 17 at the most, but he had the look of a hardened warrior about him. His clothes almost made him laugh, but then he remembered that Merlin wore what he believed was a night gown, so he didn't. The spiky brown hair on the other hand, was something he wouldn't pass on pointing out.

"Hey there, did you just wake up, or is your hair always like that?" Irvine asked, snickering. Truth be told, it wasn't all that funny, but Irvine was extremely bored, and at this point in time, a rat running around with a string attached to its tail would amuse him.

"Nah it's always like this." the brown haired youth replied, and as was customary of him, he rubbed his pointer finger under his nose, as if it itched.

Irvine realized that he hadn't introduced himself, and fearing that the boy might be in need of help or just plain wonder who he was, he held out his hand, expecting a handshake.

"My name's Irvine. I'm a friend of Leon's, and a RGRC member."

The youth shook his hand and smiled. "Really, me too! Or rather I'm an honorary member." He then sorta jumped, as if he just remembered something. "Oh yeah! My name's Sora."

Irvine smiled back. So it would seem that Leon was busy while he'd been away. He'd have to ask for more details when he got back. He went back to where he'd been sitting, and propped the chair back up. He sat down, and reached over to the desk nearby. He had left his gun lying there and figured he'd show the kid what he used in a fight.

"This here's my baby. She's gotten me outta many a bad situation before, and will continue to do so." Irvine pointed it at various spots, and acted as if it was being fired. After doing this three or four times, he put his gun back.

"So what do you wield for a weapon my friend?"

Sora held out his hand, and his Keyblade appeared in it. The sight of this made Irvine jump in surprise, causing him and the chair to fall backward.

"Ouch!" Sora started to move to see if he was okay, but Irvine had managed to get up almost instantly and closed in on him.

"I know what that is! That's a Keyblade right!" Irvine's eyes almost sparkled with excitement. Sora simply nodded and smiled.

"Can, can I try it out?" Sora laughed, and handed it over. Irvine went to swing it, but the moment he did, it vanished. This made him stumble. Worried that someone might have taken it, or that he might've dropped it, he looked around. When he realized Sora was laughing, he looked up at him. The Keyblade was back in his hand.

"I take it that the Keyblade is pretty strict when it comes to who can wield it." Sora nodded. "Alright then, I guess I won't let you hold my gun." He quickly went back over to it, and after propping the chair back up once more, sat down and pulled a small cloth rag out of a pocket. He then began to polish the metal that made up his gun. He looked at Sora while he did this.

"Pull up a chair Sora and sit down. It'll be a while before Leon gets back, and I'm pretty sure we've got some good war stories we can share." He was of course referring to their encounters with the Heartless. Although he figured Sora would have more than he did, after all, he was basically a Heartless magnet because of his weapon.

"My most memorable fight against the Heartless was about three months back, when I was back in Traverse Town..." He then went on to explain about why he was there, what he had done leading up to the fight, and how he bested his opponent. When he was finished Leon, Cid, Merlin, Yuffie, and Aerith had walked in.

"Ah darn, I guess I'll have to wait to hear one of your stories kid." Irvine stood up.

"Well if you guys don't mind, I think I'm going to find some Heartless and have some target practice." He grabbed his gun and moved toward the door. He stopped after opening it, and smiled once more at Sora.

"I like you kid, you've got spunk." And with that comment he left the old wizard's house, and onto target practice.

EDIT: I realize you said that this didn't have to be a long post, but the more I got into the audition, the more I typed. I'm rather pleased with this regardless of the outcome, partly because of how long it's been since I've done an rp of that length.

[Beaver Dude]

Honestly, I'd like to see a bit more introspection but I think that it's good enough for a

1/2 Accepted

Now hope you've impressed another one of us. :3

[yami]

and I believe it's good enough for the 2/2 Approved.