General Beatrix

[servant]

Username: servant
Current canons: Kid (Radical Dreamers)
Canon you're auditioning for: Beatrix
Media canon is from: Final Fantasy 9
Is the current canon taken?: Nope.
Audition post (400 words):


The sun stood highly on the heavens. Clouds glided by, torrenting as they endlessly so did. Birds had gathered in the skies, circling around, crying loudly. Animals had all left. A single cat remained, looking out over a battlefield.

Man fought against rat in a terrible display of battle. Wars, instigated by none other than the Alexandrian Queen, and leading those forces into battle was a General known to all as Beatrix, the cold-hearted. A swordwoman of unrivaled power; and she knew it.

"Is there none that can stand against me?!" her voice resounded over the battlefield, while her trusted blade, Save the Queen, sliced and diced and tore a way through the raging fight. Burmecians fell to her, one by one, sometimes more at a time while her powers of Seiken ripped loose.

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It did not take long before all that opposed the Alexandrian forces lay dead. It wasn't only non-Alexandrians that fell; Beatrix's own forces had suffered defeat as well, their bodies scattered across the field.

Beatrix had survived, though. As always, she emerged victorious from conflict. Though they had won, and though she was proud at her troops, the General wasn't sure whether this was what she truly wanted.

"Wars instigated by our Queen... Is this truly the right thing to do?" she thought to herself. But doubt had no place in her heart! She had pledged allegiance to the Alexandrian Royal Family. To Queen Brahne and to Princess Garnet. Blindly following orders, that was her task... Was it? She didn't know anymore.

"General!" A soldier walked up to Beatrix. One of Beatrix's soldiers. "Well done, General! With this, the world will know of Alexandria's power. Of our power. We'll be--"

"That is enough," Beatrix cut her off. Indeed. They were strong, but by no means had this... This slaughter been necessary. Her forces alone had been enough, yet their Queen insisted on the use of Black Mages. Magicians send to them by an enigmatic man who called himself Kuja. They had no emotions, no feelings... And blindly followed orders, as she did.

What had happened to the once kind Queen? That Kuja...

"Start searching for survivors!" Though she had her doubts, she had pledged loyalty. And Beatrix would not break her solemn vow, her oath to remain of service to Her Majesty. "Find them and root them out. Ensure these rats will never again be able to bear arms against us!" The soldier saluted, and with a "Yes ma'am!" ran off, gathering other able forces to push into Burmecia and round up the survivors.

Beatrix cast a glance upward, to the heavens themselves. She was greeted by Burmecia's notorious endless rain. As if the heavens themselves cried...

Casting off her further doubts, or at least pushing them to the back of her mind, the swordswoman, who was reputed to be cold-hearted and merciless, set off towards the city as well. Were there still any survivors, she would need to strike them down. For her Queen. For her Princess.

[Memories]

Alright I won't grade this on exact relationship to the character from FF9 since I never played the game (nor will I ever). I did in fact check Wiki, but I don't enjoy relying on that too much. In any case you showed an excellent case of conflicting personalities and loyalties in this audition. The action and dialogue were also above average. There is little I can actually complain about other than my distaste for sweet potatoes, but that's an entirely different story. So....

1/2 Accepted

[servant]

Please ignore this audition. I am not too happy with it and want to re-do it. Thanks~

(would I need to wait until wednesday before I can audition it again, though? )

[~/\The Dragon Writer/\~]

No. If it was 1/2 accepted already, you don't have to wait. Just go on ahead and make another.

I won't lock this, but just make sure your next post is your next audition.

[servant]

Rrrrroger. Here you go.

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"Heartless, you say?" The soldier looked sternly at the man she was talking to. He was a scrawny man, with shifty eyes and ragged clothes. He never dared quite look her in the eye; altogether one she could hardly trust.

She was Beatrix, one of two Generals of the Alexandrian Kingdom. She had been reknowned in her own World; a mighty warrior, unequalled on the field of combat. There had been none that could stand up against the might of her sword. Why, she'd once slain a hundred knights by herself. Even having lost an eye, her battle prowess remained legendary.

But no more. Her world had been destroyed; devoured after Queen Brahne fell in combat. Beatrix knew not of what had become of any of those from her world; she knew not where the Princess Garnet was, the last in the line of the Alexandrian Royal Family. The one she'd have to protect.

"Yes, lady, the Heartless destroy worlds," the man continued, but Beatrix had already lost interest. She knew Kuja had destroyed her world; though he was heartless by nature, she wouldn't consider him a "Heartless" like the black monsters that had attempted to attack her numerous times.

"Thank you," Beatrix spoke, when the man opened his mouth to say yet more. She'd heard more than enough. This man knew not of what had happened to her world, and he would most definitely not know where to find the Princess. The Princess Garnet. The one Beatrix swore fealty to.

She'd taken nary a step forward when her one eye narrowed. Before her were black creatures. Heartless. Their forms were... Like insects. Hmph. That was alright. That's how they'd fall. She drew her blade, Save the Queen, elegantly from her side, and prepared for battle.

"Heartless!" she proclaimed, intent on warning them before the fight began. It was a form of battle courtesy Beatrix was accustomed to. "You dare stand up against me, Beatrix? If you fear my blade, then fall back now!" As had happened numerous times in her encounters with these beasts... They didn't fall back at all. That was alright. They'd have it their way. She'd simply have to crush all those that stood against her until they would tire of it. She was sure the Princess was alright, and surely she'd find her. Until that time, all Beatrix would have to do is survive.

These critters were hardly worth a challenge. When the monsters did not bother preparing to flee (although the man Beatrix'd been talking to was already fleeing), the General knew what to do. It was time to squish her some insects.

[Memories]

Still mostly the same opinion. The actual KH setting was a nice improvement to an otherwise excellent audition.

1/2 Accepted

[~/\The Dragon Writer/\~]

~2/2 Accepted~

Get making your character profile.

Locked.