Yuki Character

[yuki]

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General Character Information
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Character Name:Ivy Mao
Character Age:17
Character Gender:Female
Character Race:Nobody
Character Position:Neutral
Character Personality:Ivy Can be very cold hearted at times. sHe does not like people bossing her around one bit. She will kill you if simply just suggest something to do to her. She is very sarcastic and doesn't care about people's feeling at all
Character's Appearance:http://i197.photobucket.com/albums/aa53/xXxXTearsOfBloodXxXx/punk-2.jpg
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Battle Information
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Weapon Name:Shurikens
Weapon Appearance:http://i106.photobucket.com/albums/m265/xXMotherLXx/Weapons/a88c34fb.jpg

Abilities:Clairvoyant:To be able to go in someboady's mind,Invisabilty:To make the individual not visible to the human eye,Telekenisis:To move and contort things with the individuals mind

Additional Abilities:N/A

Special Abilities:N/A

Summons:N/A

Items:N/A
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Character HistoryOne Day A man got a mistress and she gave birth to a baby this was Yuki. Being a Mistress's daughter she was never given much love and was always rejected. At the age of nine her dad was fallen into debt so he sold her to a rich family to be a maid She terribly hates him for it.. At the age of ten she realized her power in the school she attended she was in trouble for breaking the a plate so the head maid was after her with a bammboo stick she felt as if she should get away and turned invisible. At the Age of fourteen she found out she was clairvoyant when she accidently was pushed into someone while running an errand and saw their whole past she wore armwarmers since then. The family soon feared her and kicked her out She then lived in a teahouse basement and worked as a waitress the owner was like a mother to her and knew of her powers so she sent her off to travel

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[Medy]

Firstly, when you post a character, you need to post them in this section, not in the Character Chain. The Character Chain board is to link to your character after it has been approved and moved to the Approved Section.

Ok, now for me to moderate it.

Can you remove the bold from the profile, it just makes it really irritating to read with it on.

Abilities:
Clairvoyant: You can't 'go into somebody's mind'. You'll need to be more specific in exactly what you want to do with the ability, not just make a broad statement which could allow you to do effectively anything inside of the ability.

Telekinesis: You'll need an exact limit with what you can do with the telekinesis, seeing as there are millions of potential capabilities within the term. Yes, you stated that you can move things with your mind, but you'll need a limit on exactly how much you can 'move', otherwise you could be a potential powerhouse.

Other than that, perhaps more detail into the overall profile. Surely it's not too much to request a bit more information into the personality of the character?

[Medy]

It's been three weeks and no replied. I'm denying this due to inactivity.

Denied, locked and moved.