Post by hayai1441 on Sept 1, 2007 4:42:59 GMT -5
Okay, thank you Sasori for helping me with the personality contradiction, and along with that, I would like to make a few things a tad clearer.
Okay, this looks a lot more than a few things. Well, anyways, I wanted to make Hayai's profile better, easier to understand, and lengthier after reading a few topics on the suggestion board.
I must say, I didn't even know I could do stuff like this until now. I sure hope this improves the quality of Hayai's profile. This should be the last time I post here for Hayai's profile for a while, unless I want to add an ability or something.
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Okay, this was something small I wanted to edit, because I felt it was a tad vague. I originally put "Mainly human; One quarter demon". That would be 25-26%. Then he used his demon transformation skill once, which add to the count a bit more. So here is my edit.
Character Race: 72% Human; 28% Demon
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Now here is one of the main reasons I wanted to make this post; Hayai's profile. After asking Sasori about it, he came up with a way I could word it to remove the contradiction, so thanks again for that. Though I have changed his words into my own, to avoid copying.
Old Personality:
Hayai is generally a happy fellow, and refuses to think about depressing thoughts. He would go out of his way for others; whether he knows them intimately or not. Though he is able to keep his cool in most situations, blatant disrespect is one thing that really gets him in a bad mood.
Edited Personality:
Hayai is one of those people who are almost always seen wearing a smile, and is usually caught in an upbeat mood. There may be times when he is down and depressed, but he quickly shakes it off, refusing to ponder on such thoughts. The young man always helps someone in a time of need even if they were a stranger. Whether it was delivering a package, or fending off enemies, Hayai would help. Unless, of course, the person he ended up helping was the "bad guy", or someone Hayai greatly disliked.
While he is a generally happy fellow, there are only few moments when he loses his positive outlook, and loses composure; blatant disrespect. If he were to see a child talk back to their parent, he would snap. Despite these moments, it is very rare to see Hayai with his head down.
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Next is appearance, due to my first edit, the link to my picture disappeared, and I thought it would be rather difficult to think up his appearance with that vague description. So I drew up a second picture, hopefully better than the first, and decided to throw a detailed description along with it. All I ask here, is that you just replace the whole description with the following.
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Hayai Nota[/u][/url] (Drawn by Yours Truly)
Build: Hayai stands at 5'11'', and weighs 137 pounds. Due to this, he is quite thin. He has a light muscle tone in both arms, with the left arm slightly stronger than the right (Hayai is left-handed, so he usually ends up using that arm more often); and strong muscle tone in the legs. His skin is a shade of light tan, and he has a clean complexion.
Genetics:[/u] Hayai's hair is ten to twelve inches long; and it always seems to stand up in a wild fashion, mainly from the fact that Hayai rarely combs it. The entire front of his hair is a bright orange, only the tip of the front, and the tips of the bangs are black along with streaks of dark-colored hair scattered around the front. On the entire back-side of his head, the hair is a deep shade of black.
The young man's eyes are a bright shade of green, holding the same color as an emerald gemstone.
As for tattoos, Hayai has none. But what he does have, are multiple scars or "stripes" all over his body excluding his feet, hands, neck, and forehead. They travel up and down his arms and legs in a tiger-like pattern, as well as the stripes on his abdomen and chest. On his face however, there are only three stripes. On the right side, is one large stripe; which is several inches long. The second stripe is located on the other cheek, but is slightly smaller. The third and final scar/stripe, is located right above the second stripe, and is much smaller than the two in comparison.
Clothing: As for clothing, Hayai wears nothing too extravagant or expensive. He wears a t-shirt, with the sleeve reaching only a few inches above the elbow. It is bright orange, matching his hair, and has a red circle in the front of the shirt, where the center of the chest is located. In the red circle, was a face. It had angry eyes in the shape of watermelon slices, and a grin in the same shape; the eyes and mouth were orange.
For pants, Hayai wears baggy, denim jeans, that is shade of dark blue. It fits snugly around the waist, but the pant legs widen on their way to the bottom; which is only an inch above the ankle. He wears orange slip-ons with a white insole. The only other noticeable detail would be the single, thick black stripe running across each shoe from one side to the other.
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Now onto the final topic of this thread, abilities. I will not be adding or editing what Hayai's abilities do, I am merely editing the description. Hopefully, this will make it appear much more detailed and easier to picture when role-playing.
First, I would like to explain Hayai's super-speed better, so here is a new description:
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Slot One[/u][/b] - Superhuman-Speed
Hayai's demon heritage gives him the ability to move at supernatural speeds. This would be an impossible feat for some, but not to Hayai. The usual speed he travels at is sixty to one hundred miles per hour, as fast as a speeding cheetah or automobile. At his highest speeds, he is seen as a blur, or a big mass of color. Though, like most cars, if you were to keep his eyes trained straight on him, the boy would appear as if he was sprinting.
This is a great ability to have, as it allows him to make swift attacks, or quick getaways with little to no energy used up. Though a strong strike to either leg would greatly impair his speed, or if he were in sand or water at least one foot deep.
Super High-Speed Movement - Upgrade
Upgraded from "Superhuman-Speed
An upgrade of Hayai's original super-speed. His maximum speed greatly increases, allowing him of quick bursts of speed that create after-images when he moves. Though he actually doesn't disappear then reappear somewhere else in the area. He simple disappears and then reappears one step ahead of himself, creating a flickering like effect. This doesn't effect the enemy's ability to see Hayai at all though.
Limits: Hayai can travel at even greater speeds outside of combat, but when he enters a battle, his speed is reduced. The reduced speed is that of his regular superhuman-speed.
In the thread discussing light-speed and teleportation, Avenger commented on how Hayai's super-speed is allowed, seeing as someone can see him coming. I think the upgrade edit is cutting it close, but it actually doesn't allow him to disappear then reappear twenty feet away. Now
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Slot Two - Procella Palma
A magic technique Hayai taught himself in the beginning of his journey, and is currently his only projectile and offensive magic spell. The young man starts out as if he were casting a thunder spell, except when he holds out his hand, the lightning forms within it. It starts out with arcs of lightning shooting out of Hayai's hand violently, until the lashing out becomes sporadic, and soon ceasing to a halt. The lightning curls up into a small ball, varying in size. It will sometime take the size of a marble, while at other times it will be much like a baseball. But once the lightning forms itself into a sphere, a cream-colored, porcelain shell surrounds it, encasing the electricity. At this point it is just like a bomb, or grenade. When it comes into contact with something once thrown, it explodes. The force of the explosion is similar to that of a Thundara spell.
This is quite a versatile technique, as Hayai can use it to fight with enemies, he could also use it to tear down common obstacles, and even propel himself into the air. There is a rare chance of the "bomb" exploding in Hayai's palm.
Limits: Hayai can use the Procella Palma without a cool-down, since it isn't incredibly powerful. Yet with each one thrown, the shell becomes weaker, increasing the chance of it exploding on Hayai. Not only that, but the strength of all of his magic decreases in strength with each one formed.
Hayai was the second character to be accepted (I think) on the site, thus he was accepted before cool-downs and such. So I am not sure if I would have to add one or not. Then if "Reflect". Not too much I can add here, but I will add what I can.
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Slot Three[/u][/i] - Reflect
A simple and weak defensive spell; and the only one Hayai knows so far. When he raises an arm and shouts it's name, a barrier appears around him. The barrier is in the shape of a sphere, and six feet in radius. The sphere is transparent, with a silver tint; and is formed from multiple hexagons connecting.
When something strikes the shield, the attack merely bounces off. Then, where the barrier had been struck, it sends out a pellet of pure energy. It isn't very strong, but can still cause a little bit of pain.
Reflect can absorb and send back most projectiles with ease, but if someone were to rush at the shield and attack it violently, the shield would shatter.
Limits: The barrier cannot take too many physical attacks, or else it would shatter. Once shattered, Hayai cannot use it for six turns.
Okay, this looks a lot more than a few things. Well, anyways, I wanted to make Hayai's profile better, easier to understand, and lengthier after reading a few topics on the suggestion board.
I must say, I didn't even know I could do stuff like this until now. I sure hope this improves the quality of Hayai's profile. This should be the last time I post here for Hayai's profile for a while, unless I want to add an ability or something.
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Okay, this was something small I wanted to edit, because I felt it was a tad vague. I originally put "Mainly human; One quarter demon". That would be 25-26%. Then he used his demon transformation skill once, which add to the count a bit more. So here is my edit.
Character Race: 72% Human; 28% Demon
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Now here is one of the main reasons I wanted to make this post; Hayai's profile. After asking Sasori about it, he came up with a way I could word it to remove the contradiction, so thanks again for that. Though I have changed his words into my own, to avoid copying.
Old Personality:
Hayai is generally a happy fellow, and refuses to think about depressing thoughts. He would go out of his way for others; whether he knows them intimately or not. Though he is able to keep his cool in most situations, blatant disrespect is one thing that really gets him in a bad mood.
Edited Personality:
Hayai is one of those people who are almost always seen wearing a smile, and is usually caught in an upbeat mood. There may be times when he is down and depressed, but he quickly shakes it off, refusing to ponder on such thoughts. The young man always helps someone in a time of need even if they were a stranger. Whether it was delivering a package, or fending off enemies, Hayai would help. Unless, of course, the person he ended up helping was the "bad guy", or someone Hayai greatly disliked.
While he is a generally happy fellow, there are only few moments when he loses his positive outlook, and loses composure; blatant disrespect. If he were to see a child talk back to their parent, he would snap. Despite these moments, it is very rare to see Hayai with his head down.
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Next is appearance, due to my first edit, the link to my picture disappeared, and I thought it would be rather difficult to think up his appearance with that vague description. So I drew up a second picture, hopefully better than the first, and decided to throw a detailed description along with it. All I ask here, is that you just replace the whole description with the following.
Code:
Hayai Nota[/u][/url] (Drawn by Yours Truly)
Build: Hayai stands at 5'11'', and weighs 137 pounds. Due to this, he is quite thin. He has a light muscle tone in both arms, with the left arm slightly stronger than the right (Hayai is left-handed, so he usually ends up using that arm more often); and strong muscle tone in the legs. His skin is a shade of light tan, and he has a clean complexion.
Genetics:[/u] Hayai's hair is ten to twelve inches long; and it always seems to stand up in a wild fashion, mainly from the fact that Hayai rarely combs it. The entire front of his hair is a bright orange, only the tip of the front, and the tips of the bangs are black along with streaks of dark-colored hair scattered around the front. On the entire back-side of his head, the hair is a deep shade of black.
The young man's eyes are a bright shade of green, holding the same color as an emerald gemstone.
As for tattoos, Hayai has none. But what he does have, are multiple scars or "stripes" all over his body excluding his feet, hands, neck, and forehead. They travel up and down his arms and legs in a tiger-like pattern, as well as the stripes on his abdomen and chest. On his face however, there are only three stripes. On the right side, is one large stripe; which is several inches long. The second stripe is located on the other cheek, but is slightly smaller. The third and final scar/stripe, is located right above the second stripe, and is much smaller than the two in comparison.
Clothing: As for clothing, Hayai wears nothing too extravagant or expensive. He wears a t-shirt, with the sleeve reaching only a few inches above the elbow. It is bright orange, matching his hair, and has a red circle in the front of the shirt, where the center of the chest is located. In the red circle, was a face. It had angry eyes in the shape of watermelon slices, and a grin in the same shape; the eyes and mouth were orange.
For pants, Hayai wears baggy, denim jeans, that is shade of dark blue. It fits snugly around the waist, but the pant legs widen on their way to the bottom; which is only an inch above the ankle. He wears orange slip-ons with a white insole. The only other noticeable detail would be the single, thick black stripe running across each shoe from one side to the other.
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Now onto the final topic of this thread, abilities. I will not be adding or editing what Hayai's abilities do, I am merely editing the description. Hopefully, this will make it appear much more detailed and easier to picture when role-playing.
First, I would like to explain Hayai's super-speed better, so here is a new description:
Code:
Slot One[/u][/b] - Superhuman-Speed
Hayai's demon heritage gives him the ability to move at supernatural speeds. This would be an impossible feat for some, but not to Hayai. The usual speed he travels at is sixty to one hundred miles per hour, as fast as a speeding cheetah or automobile. At his highest speeds, he is seen as a blur, or a big mass of color. Though, like most cars, if you were to keep his eyes trained straight on him, the boy would appear as if he was sprinting.
This is a great ability to have, as it allows him to make swift attacks, or quick getaways with little to no energy used up. Though a strong strike to either leg would greatly impair his speed, or if he were in sand or water at least one foot deep.
Super High-Speed Movement - Upgrade
Upgraded from "Superhuman-Speed
An upgrade of Hayai's original super-speed. His maximum speed greatly increases, allowing him of quick bursts of speed that create after-images when he moves. Though he actually doesn't disappear then reappear somewhere else in the area. He simple disappears and then reappears one step ahead of himself, creating a flickering like effect. This doesn't effect the enemy's ability to see Hayai at all though.
Limits: Hayai can travel at even greater speeds outside of combat, but when he enters a battle, his speed is reduced. The reduced speed is that of his regular superhuman-speed.
In the thread discussing light-speed and teleportation, Avenger commented on how Hayai's super-speed is allowed, seeing as someone can see him coming. I think the upgrade edit is cutting it close, but it actually doesn't allow him to disappear then reappear twenty feet away. Now
Code:
Slot Two - Procella Palma
A magic technique Hayai taught himself in the beginning of his journey, and is currently his only projectile and offensive magic spell. The young man starts out as if he were casting a thunder spell, except when he holds out his hand, the lightning forms within it. It starts out with arcs of lightning shooting out of Hayai's hand violently, until the lashing out becomes sporadic, and soon ceasing to a halt. The lightning curls up into a small ball, varying in size. It will sometime take the size of a marble, while at other times it will be much like a baseball. But once the lightning forms itself into a sphere, a cream-colored, porcelain shell surrounds it, encasing the electricity. At this point it is just like a bomb, or grenade. When it comes into contact with something once thrown, it explodes. The force of the explosion is similar to that of a Thundara spell.
This is quite a versatile technique, as Hayai can use it to fight with enemies, he could also use it to tear down common obstacles, and even propel himself into the air. There is a rare chance of the "bomb" exploding in Hayai's palm.
Limits: Hayai can use the Procella Palma without a cool-down, since it isn't incredibly powerful. Yet with each one thrown, the shell becomes weaker, increasing the chance of it exploding on Hayai. Not only that, but the strength of all of his magic decreases in strength with each one formed.
Hayai was the second character to be accepted (I think) on the site, thus he was accepted before cool-downs and such. So I am not sure if I would have to add one or not. Then if "Reflect". Not too much I can add here, but I will add what I can.
Code:
Slot Three[/u][/i] - Reflect
A simple and weak defensive spell; and the only one Hayai knows so far. When he raises an arm and shouts it's name, a barrier appears around him. The barrier is in the shape of a sphere, and six feet in radius. The sphere is transparent, with a silver tint; and is formed from multiple hexagons connecting.
When something strikes the shield, the attack merely bounces off. Then, where the barrier had been struck, it sends out a pellet of pure energy. It isn't very strong, but can still cause a little bit of pain.
Reflect can absorb and send back most projectiles with ease, but if someone were to rush at the shield and attack it violently, the shield would shatter.
Limits: The barrier cannot take too many physical attacks, or else it would shatter. Once shattered, Hayai cannot use it for six turns.
I did post in shades of grey if anyone even remembers that lmao