Xemnas, The Superior

[donald2]

Username: donald2
Current canons: N/A
Canon you're auditioning for: Xemnas, Xehanort's Nobody
Media canon is from: Kingdom Hearts 1, Kingdom Hearts 2
Is the current canon taken?: No.
Audition post (400 words):

It was... dark. Abyssal, empty of any light at all. Not even the realm of darkness could embody this much evil.

His eyes shot open. Instantly, his piercing gaze slowly took in the empty surroundings, the darkness the ultimate shield to his sight. It was magical. There was nothing. It was pure black. It was silent except for the nobody's breathing, a pointless habit left over from his humanity. The shallow breaths were loud and rang out against the absence of noise. Everything echoed...

What... is this? Xemnas' curiousity was peaked. This infinite darkness, this majestic essence, it was so powerful; he could feel it. The Superior noted that he was floating in the darkness. This was not a world...

His breath rang out ominously once again, disturbing the perfect silence... The ultimate symbol of nothing.

Suddenly, light flashed before Xemnas. It was an oval of blinding light, calling to the nobody. That is not light... Nobodies do not belong in the light. The superior assured himself on this matter, coming to a less-than-shocking conclusion a few moments late. This is merely an absence in the darkness... Nothing.

Another realization. He was standing now. Xemnas felt the solid darkness below his feet, almost as if it was a platform. With this acknowledgment of gravity, the nobody also remembered why he was here. Sora... Just the name of the keyblade wielder brought it all back.

That last, burning magical wave hitting him. The nobody began to fall, but before he could hit the ground, darkness had consumed him, sending his mind into oblivion.

That is where I am. It wasn't shocking, to say the least. Xemnas managed to stifle a slight chuckle. Here he was, the center of nothingness, the epitome of darkness, and there was a portal in front of him letting him out.

As the nobody walked towards the portal, one would hear the clang of his boots meeting the walkway; it was almost metallic. However, though they may have heard the footsteps clashing against silence, they would not hear a single breath, a single hint of air moving.

Only humans breathe.

[High's .Valentine.]

Shorter than I would have expected. I doubt that the audition even reach the 400 words mark.

There's not enough details here for KH's major baddie and it's not very much in depth. While it's better than most Xemnas auditions I've read [and trust me, I've read a lot of...below standard Xemnas auditions], I still don't think this shows you're up to par. Dialogue-wise, while it's not enough to convince me, it's pretty good. He's usually more long-winded than that. XD

As for being Superior. I don't feel much superiority over here except for the fact that he doesn't need to breathe. I thought it would have been better if he had assumed that it is his power over the darkness that he was allowed to move and walk rather than realizing that things are happening. Xemnas doesn't seem to have much control over his surrounding environment. He's not called the Superior for nothing.

I think I'm going to have to 1/2 deny this. Who knows, maybe other people will disagree with me.

[Rhea]

No, that wasn’t even 400 words according to my counter.

Besides, where’s the long-winded speech? XD He’s too succinct and to the point in his thoughts, definitely unlike in the game. This isn’t a bad audition at all, just too short. I suggest trying again with a more detailed audition. It doesn’t have to be 10,000 words long but at least pass the required amount. Try to include more of his personality, I can see Xemnas here but it’s just not enough.

2/2 Denied.