Number VI, The Cloaked Schemer

[Homac]

Username: Homac
Current canons: Ratix
Canon you're auditioning for: Zexion
Media canon is from: KH 2
Is the current canon taken?: Yes, but the owner, konaa, hasn't been active in months.
Audition post (400 words):_____________________________

His plan had failed, simply due to the actions of the traitor, Axel. Now he was at death's door, and he knew it.

'I should have seen this coming.' The thought rang through Zexion's mind as Axel and the Replica appeared. 'I should have known something like this would occur. The state of the Organization here should have put me on my guard.' As these thoughts appeared, he heard Axel put the idea of his death for power into the Replica's head.

"Axel," he said, his voice steady despite the position he was in, "I never expected you to be a traitor. It was the only thing I didn't take into account."

The red head simply smirked at him as the replica pondered his suggestion, "Well, that's just the way it is. It's really too bad, I was having fun with our little bets." By this point, the Replica had made up his mind, and began walking purposefully towards Zexion.

"Just answer me this Axel: Why turn on me? Marluxia is the traitor, I at least follow the Organization."

In a futile attempt at his own defense, Zexion summoned his Tome of Judgement, only to have it knocked out of his weakened hands.

"Sorry Zexion," he heard Axel say as the Replica grabbed him by the throat, "You just knew too much."

As the Replica began to access his dark powers, one last thought went through Zexion's head, 'I wonder... maybe the plan will work even without me... I did want to see it succeed though...'

Then, everything went black.

[High's .Valentine.]

Homac. That's nowhere near 400 words, which is the minimum requirement. You're trying to audition for a major character of KH, which is different than auditioning for a minor character like Ratix. It'll be judge with a harsher eye and a higher standard.

I'm not going to give an approval or deny yet. Instead, I'm going to ask you to revise this audition and make it up to par in detail and depth. There's little way to show good enough depth for an Organization canon with just 260 words.

[Akito]

Maybe include a bit more self reflection than interaction with Axel? Possible scenarios may be 'lamenting' his friend's, Lexaeus, defeat.

[Homac]

Ah, I do need to stop writing at night. This was my first try at a major canon, and the advice is accepted happily.

I'll be sure to re-research, and remake.

Lock this thread, and I'll come back, better than ever.

[Akito]

I like your attitude to this, it is very appreciated.

Locked upon request