Doctor Kevarkan

[gouki]

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Username: Akuma

Gender: Male

Other Character(s): Jin
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Only applicable to canons.

Audition Thread:
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Name: Doctor Abel Kevarkan

Alias: The Doctor

Age: 56

Gender: Male

Race: Nobody

Alignment: evil

Origin: Unknown
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Appearance:

Physical Features:
The doctor is a very slim looking individual about 6' tall with no real muscular build. What makes him strange is the color of his skin which is a combination of gray with some violet markings on his body of the Nobody symbol located on his chest and the back of his neck. He appears to look like any regular humanoid Nobody just the color of his skin is what exposes him.

Facial Features:
The doctor has a long skinny face with a big nose. He has a thick gray beard and mustache and furry gray eyes that cover his eyes which are yellow. His hair is about 4" long and is combed back but unkempt and is gray with black streaks along the sides covering his pointy ears.

Clothing:
He wears the type of clothes most doctors would wear. A pair of brown slacks and brown penny loafers with black socks that go up to the center of his leg. A black collared sweatshirt with various designs on the back that looks like a re modified version of the Nobody symbol. A bright red tie that is loosened along with the collar and a wrinkled white lab coat that is is in shreds along the bottom. Various pens and different colored test tubes are all jammed inside the lab coat pockets. And lastly a broken silver watch which continues to turn rapidly is worn on his left wrist.

Miscellaneous Items/Articles:
He has on a employee hospital badge but the name and picture seem to be scratched off indicating it isn't him on the picture. And various small beakers with different colored liquids inside them and overly used shot needles.
Personality:

Resolve:
To create a Nobody without it being born from a human in essence the perfect Nobody a pure one.

Fears:
Nothing, since he himself is a Nobody there is no emotions for him to have henceforth no fears.

Hopes:
To see his life's work become a success. He hopes that his perfect Nobody will be the first of billions in which he will rule over.

Hobbies:
He is 100% dedicated to his work and research. There is no time for a break since every minute wasted is time he could use to continue his research.

Public Personality/Private Personality:
The Doctors outer personality is very much the same as his inner personality. He wears his personality on his shoulders and always speaks what is on his mind not caring if anyone may be offended. He is one of the few Nobodies who has accepted his fate as a Nobody and has abandoned all ties to his past life when he had a heart. He is rude, self loving, arrogant always praising himself to be more superior than everyone else. To him everyone he sees are nothing but imperfect freaks who aren't worthy of breathing the same air. He is incredibly insane and tends to talk to himself almost bickering from time to time. But even with those fallacies he sees himself as a supreme being high above everyone else.

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Class: Mage

Weapons: His brain is his weapon. It's the most powerful weapon anyone can use. He uses no swords, spears, or guns, just the power of the mind. To use his mind to it's full potential The Doctor has created a special chip and inserted it into his brain that enables him to control a mechanized cyborg.


Weapon Description:

Unique Notes:

Abilities:

Base Ability: Summoner

Name: Lucifer

Appearance: A humanoid cyborg covered in black armor. It has the same kind of appearance of a Dark Knight in the Final Fantasy games but wears a large brown trench coat over the armor. It has beaming yellow eyes and has long, wild, silver hair. It carries a black sword roughly four feet long. The Doctor uses him for battle purposes but has a built in microphone in it's head so that he can have it say whatever he is saying. He can control Lucifer from anywhere in the world at any distant location he may be just as long as they are both in the same world.

Base Ability: Mechanized Machinery

Sub Abilities:

Short Circuit: Lucifer will appear to be short circuiting but then rush towards an opponent grabbing them then channeling 200 volts of electric current throughout their body. One time use per battle and once used Lucifer will have to wait two of his turns before he can use any type of attack.

Psycho Bomber: The dark knights hands will be covered in darkness and his eyes will turn dark red. Lucifer will then rush at an opponent at great speed and begin to pummel them with physical attacks. With each punch landed it causes a great amount of damage dealt to the person being hit. It lasts for three of his posts and after that Lucifer must wait three of his turns before using it again.

Plasma Shot- Lucifer fires a thin red energy beam from his eyes. It can't go through thick armor or very strong shields but it can eventually get through it after a few more tries depending on how thick it is.

Items:

Equips:

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History:

Doctor Kevarkan has no history. No one knows where he came from or how he actually became a Nobody. He says it was his destiny to become a Nobody so it is implied that he became on out of his own free will. It's not even known if he was ever a real doctor or if he even went to medical school, but he knows all types of medical procedures as well as surgical procedures by the book, word for word. He just calls himself the Doctor so it's anyones guess. It was if he appeared out of thin air one day and began researching on finding a way to create a Nobody without the need of a human with a strong heart then loosing it. Later on he built Lucifer as a bodyguard to make sure no one would interrupt him and his research. His advanced mind is able to do multiple tasks so he is able to fully control Lucifer and work on his research without straining his mind.

With the worlds always in a state of turmoil Kevarkan will travel from world to world and set up a research facility to continue his work uninterrupted. Lately though he is in need of funds since his last financial sponsor mysteriously stopped funding him so there will be times where he will send Lucifer to steal from others in order to fund his research. But he has heard rumors of a group that could possibly help fund his research.
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Lucifer is weak against light based attacks and defenses.
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[Memories]

Before I do anything else you must do some revising on your subs. I understand you are a summoner, but this is going quite a bit over the line. First off I would like a description of the base ability for clarification's sake. Then after that keep in mind, you absolutely must leave room for flaws in your subs. The opponent has to have a chance to counter these attacks. You must make those flaws absolutely clear. After I stop my listing below on your errors I want you to expand the descriptions on all of the subs so it is clear what is going on in each attack.

#1: Short Circuit- In short (heh), you need to tone everything down. You can't flat out kill a Defender with one attack. I enjoy the different damage output for each class, but its getting a bit extreme. For Warrior you can put Light Damage. Mage- Light damage with a one turn stun. Defender- Heavy Damage. Actually I would allow you to add stun to all of those. You can even make it quite difficult to dodge if you want. After that I just want one more restriction. Make it shut down for two turns instead of one.

Ultra Evil Edit: Yes well I just realized what I said below about the cooldown contradicts what I said here. Make the ability have a lengthy cooldown time if you still plan on keeping it.

#2: Psycho Bomber- I'm not sure what to do with this one. Pummeling moves in my opinion should last for one turn and be done with it. The greater concern is that you cannot simply mash a character to blood and bits of bone as cool as that sounds. You may cause heavy damage and make it another difficult attack to dodge, but it can't be instant death over the next three turns. One more thing, you don't have to have it become immobilized. A two turn immobilization would make the opponent use his entire arsenal to bring you down, and it would work if you have no way to defend yourself. Just do a cooldown, where you can't use the ability for two or three turns, but you'll be able to attack normally otherwise.

#3: Tone it down. Look I'm all for violence (really I am that's how I become undepressed), but in the KH universe there are certain limits. You can't use a laser beam that will make a large gaping hole in a opponent. It just doesn't fit. Overall this seems like your weakest attack out of the bunch (even though the others still mean certain death) IF you make it more agreeable. It can be a strong plasma shot (not heavy, but not quite medium) that has no cooldown. Then you could use it all you want. That would still make this summon a powerful force to be reckoned with, while not raping the living shit out of everything it sees.

To just put an ease to my mind I'm going to bring another mod in here to help me out with this. You're not in trouble or anything, but I need a second opinion on the abilities.

[~/\The Dragon Writer/\~]

I'll be that other mod. Honestly, your abilities need a large revamping. First off, mechanized darkness is two different bases in one. It's perfectly fine without the darkness part.

Second, the majority of your abilities spell 'god-mod' to me. Cardiac arrest on contact? Beating to a bloody pulp? No.

Third, your first ability has multiple effects. There's no reason it should change with each person's class. The cardiac arrest part is way more than anyone needs for an effect.

Fourth, your third ability...piercing through people? That's basically instant kill with almost no restriction for cooldown.

Fifth...your second ability is just overall...no. One punch basically means a lifetime of being crippled.

I would just revamp the entire abilities section.

[gouki]

Alright I fixed it I apologize for making them look incredibally strong but when you have this puny doctor with no physical strength but still has that bloodlust you need something to make sure you can still fufill that killing lust. Most weren't intended to be a one kill type of thing like the second one I was just making it sound cooler since I expected that there would be people who would have some kind of person or ability who can't be broken or bruised.

[Memories]

I almost forgot, Lucifer has to have a vunerability of some sort, which allows others to have a fighting chance. Otherwise he would be virtually unstoppable.

Another thing with the first sub. You will still have to remove the cardiac arrest/death part. Even if its only a likelihood it is still too much of a risk. You have three options with this sub. Heavy damage and utter disoreintation for something like two turns, make it easy to avoid, or scrap it and decide on a new one.

Even if you are being forced to tone down the sub once more just remember that even with his extreme weakness, Lucifer will be very hard to bring down. The same goes for any summon. The subs don't make the character (or in this case a summon), its how you use him to his fullest extent. A deadly black sword will make short work of most things with the proper handling.

Fix those things, and I will accept this.

PS: You can remove the one post cooldown on your third sub. It would be perfectly acceptable without it.

[gouki]

I modified it. Is there anything else I need to do?

[Memories]

Well then everything is acceptable now. So....

Accepted, Locked, Whatever