Kiwi

[Twilight]

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~Basic info~

Behind every great individual, there is that voice which keeps them going onward and toward their next great adventure. [/center][/i]

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Username ~ : Twilight

Other characters ~ : None.

Is this character canon? ~ : Nope.

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~Character Info~

Waking up in the morning, your thoughts are cluttered. It takes a moment for you to fully become aware of your surroundings, but once you do, everything about your life comes back to you.

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Name ~ : Kiwi

Age ~ : 17

Birthplace ~ : Omega, a world where advanced technology and magic intermingle. It is ruled by Technocrats from their floating citadels, Barons and Dukes who carefully hoard the greatest and most powerful scientific and magical secrets, and constantly vie with each other over resources, prestige, and territory. Magic is an everyday thing, as every Omegan is born with an innate affinity for an Element. Even those not trained or skilled as mages (known as Adepts) have some small influence over their Element.

Gender ~ : Male

Race ~ : Human
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~Appearance~

As you are heading out the door of your house, a small glimmer of light catches your eye. You turn around and see a mirror, putting you face to face with your reflection.

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Physical appearance ~ : At 5'8" Kiwi is not so physically impressive, and his wiry frame doesn't inspire much fear in his enemies. But years of fighting have honed it into a surprisingly strong and agile body; he's no pushover, and even if he lacks pure brute force, he makes up for it with speed. His hair is a light green, roughly shoulder-length and unkempt as he pays little attention to it. His eyes are a similar pale emerald, so much that they almost appear to be completely white from a distance; they are usually half-lidded, as if he does not want to look too closely at the world around him, his expression neutral.

Clothing/Accessories ~ : Kiwi typically wears some variation of a dark gray hooded sweater, loose-fitting light brown pants, and boots. He also wears a gray metal bangle around his neck; it once belonged to Lime, and was a gift before her passing, a charm meant to ward away danger in her absence.

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~Personality~

As you're walking through the door, you see many sights that influence your mood. The different feelings that suddenly wash over you are many, leaving you with a strange mix of emotions.

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Alignment ~ : Neutral Good

Behavior ~ : Though he has always been somewhat quiet and reserved, Kiwi was once more open and expressive than he is at present. Scarred by his failures, he now has a bleaker outlook on life. He carries around a lot of guilt and lacks confidence in his own abilities and judgment, resulting in a bad habit of second-guessing himself. This can lead him to be paralyzed by indecision at inopportune moments. He is at heart a realist, and unlike others who may fight by his side, does not see the world divided clearly in black and white; still, Kiwi has strong convictions, and once he has settled on a course of action he is not easily swayed from it. Kiwi also has a strong desire to make up for the mistakes of his past; he seeks absolution. Among strangers, Kiwi is polite and straightforward but indifferent and largely humorless, revealing little of himself, standing apart and trying to face his personal problems alone. He takes a while to form friendships, afraid more of hurting others than getting hurt himself (though has trust issues, especially with authority figures); but he will be more open once such bonds are made, and is a steadfast companion. Kiwi dislikes direct confrontations and avoids combat alone when possible; when fighting with allies, he prefers to support them with his magic while they handle the primary offense.
Kiwi is also a terrible pilot and mechanic; Lime used to handle all the flying. And the landing. He's especially not very good at those.

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~Weapons~

Suddenly, a Heartless appears in front of you, brandishing its claws and threatening to attack. You reach for your weapon and equip it, ready to defend yourself.

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Primary Weapon(s)

ID: Shadow
Quality: Average

Kiwi has no martial training, and does not wield a true weapon of his own. However, Shadow is Kiwi's innate Element within his homeworld's magic system. Though not as powerful as the other Elements, it is versatile, able to take on some of the attributes of the others (to be clever, one could say it's a pale "shadow" of the other Elements); it can be solid and sharp like stone, malleable like water, wild like fire, or swift and ethereal like the wind; but at the same time he could not use it to light a lamp, or douse a flame. In combat, Kiwi attacks most often by manipulating his own shadow, able to give it form and substance, manifesting it as claw-like blades and/or "tentacles" to slash and stab with.

Secondary Weapon(s)

ID: None

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~Abilities~

Just as you're about to fight the creature, you feel the power of your ancestors filling you. The strength of a thousand men courses through your veins as you prepare for battle.

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AP left: 0

Gravity
Manipulates gravity in a limited area, able to increase its pull by up to five times its typical force. Most often used to crush foes, but can also be used to temporarily negate gravity. While casting the spell, a small sphere of dark purple energy will begin to appear at the center of the targeted area for a few seconds, absorbing black motes of matter before bursting outwards to a large 6' wide orb.

Strength: Weak
Uses: Once per post; effects last until his next post. Must wait two turns to use again.

Haste
Accelerates time around a target, sharpening their reflexes and doubling movement and attack speed. Kiwi will usually cast this spell on himself immediately when forced into melee range, to help compensate for his lack of skill. More often he uses it to aid any allies that specialize in close combat when he's not being attacked directly himself.

Strength: Weak
Uses: Can only effect one target at a time. Lasts for one to five turns, but can't be used again for an equivalent amount of time after the effect ends.

Rasp
Coming from a world full of magic-users, Kiwi has had some training in techniques for countering other spellcasters. Several needle-shaped shards of red light appear around the target and stab into them; they cause neither physical damage nor pain, but send a magical surge through the target that disrupts their focus. Though it may not hurt, it does feel really annoying - like an intense itch that you can't scratch, or nails sliding down a chalkboard... basically the target is filled with whatever sensation would distract them the most.

Strength: Weak
Uses: Once per post; must wait five turns to use again. Delays a spell or other magic-based ability/attack being used by one turn. The target may choose to give up using the Rasped ability and try something else after the delay.

Stop
Temporarily freezes an enemy in time. A glowing golden glyph that resembles a clock face will appear around the targeted area; the 'hands' will be spinning quickly at first, but will slow to a crawl after a few seconds. With smaller, weaker-willed foes, several can be caught in the spell's effect at once.

Strength: Moderate
Uses: Once per post; cannot be used again for five turns. Targets cannot take any action for one turn. Can effect up to three common enemies within a 10' wide sphere, or one PC/boss-level NPC/gigantic monster.

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~History~

As you slay the last of the beasts, you put your weapon aside, and walk away, knowing your tale of bravery will be told for thousands of years to come.

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Kiwi shares little of his past, even with friends. On Omega, Shadow is a rare Elemental affinity, and its wielders are often looked down upon, mistrusted, or even prosecuted, especially due to the parallels many draw to the powers of Darkness (though in truth it is no more corrupt than any other Element, capable of being used for good or evil). Some superstitious types even go so far as to abandon or kill a child if it is found to be attuned to Shadow (one of the prime factors attributing to their rarity), which is likely how Kiwi ended up at the Academy as an infant, without even a name. A boarding school for those training to become Adepts located on Omega's surface on neutral ground, the Omegan Academy of Magical Arts had a tradition of taking in orphans, children whose families were lost in the crossfire or fallout of one of the many small but common Technocrat Wars. Those too young to know their own names were traditionally given one from the plants in the Academy's garden, which is where Kiwi's unusual name originated. Forming a strong bond with one of the war orphans, a girl named Lime, Kiwi would have lived a relatively comfortable but largely uneventful life as a servant or scribe to the staff and students of the Academy.
However, at a young age both Kiwi and Lime were found to have strong Elemental affinities - his own Shadow, and Lime's equally rare affinity to Light - and they both became students themselves (his teachers were fortunately less narrow-minded about Kiwi's affinity).
Kiwi has yet to let many details of the intervening years slip, but at some point during their training, around when he was twelve, Lime came into possession of a Keyblade, and he stayed by her side as she was drawn into the fight against the Heartless and those that would seek to use the power of Darkness for their own purposes. For a time they traveled from world to world, but two years ago everything changed. Kiwi has never shared these events with anyone, but it can be inferred that Lime was killed, and Kiwi was at least in part to blame (he certainly holds himself responsible for her death, at least). It also seems that the duo was betrayed by someone close to them. Kiwi seems to have no desire to return to Omega, and has been hopping from world to world since Lime's passing, trying to keep the Darkness at bay on his own however he can. He seeks answers to why Twilight did not simply disappear when Lime died - he carries the Keyblade with him, though it is cold and powerless in his hands - as the secrets of the Keyblade and its power elude him, and hopes for a more permanent way to end the Heartless threat once and for all; more recently, he has heard rumors of others who wield the mystical weapons, and has been looking for one of these fabled Keybearers.

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~Class~

Before you embark on your journey a vision comes upon you. You see three weapons in front of you.

~ A sword of terrible destruction - The power of the warrior: Invincible courage.

~ A shield to repel all - The power of the guardian: Kindness to aid friends.

~ A staff of wonder and ruin - The power of the mystic: Inner strength.

You know that one of them must be chosen. What power will you seek?

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"The power of the guardian. I've no interest in the so-called glory of battle or flashy displays of power; in the end, all that matters is that you and your friends live to fight together again."

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~Other~

Displaying a talent for magic at a young age, Kiwi focused on training to be an Adept before events forced him off his homeworld. Though he is far too young and inexperienced to be considered a master mage, he is a skilled spellcaster, and he relies on his magic almost exclusively in a fight. He has an affinity for spells that manipulate time and space; he usually prefers to disable or weaken enemies before finishing them off or allowing someone else to. His strength lies more in manipulating the battlefield rather than a more direct offense. Kiwi's versatile and generally more subtle magic is deceptively strong, and enemies tend to underestimate a spellcaster who can't hurl giant fireballs or summon lightning storms at will. He has large reserves of magical energy, and most of his spells are more efficient than a more direct, traditional elemental offense when used wisely. While not a genius, he also has a keen and intuitive sense for tactics and the flow of combat, knowing when and where to put his spells to best effect, and is a quick study in new situations. It also helps that he has years of experience fighting the Heartless and traveling between worlds alongside a Keybearer.
In addition to his more powerful spells, Kiwi can also cast Slow/Slowga on a group of enemies to hinder their reflexes and movement speed. However, it usually does not work on strong-willed foes, and is a channeled ability - he is unable to cast any other spells while maintaining this effect.

[Twilight]

Bizarre... I just noticed my profile was somehow posted twice.

[Heroic Bilby]

Dec 2, 2009 19:52:19 GMT -5 Twilight said:

Name ~ : Kiwi

Might want to remove the excess code there.

Dec 2, 2009 19:52:19 GMT -5 Twilight said:

Primary Weapon(s)

ID: None
Quality: N/A

Kiwi has no martial training, and does not wield a true weapon of his own.

Secondary Weapon(s)

ID: Shadow

Kiwi's innate Element within his homeworld's magic system. Though not as powerful as the other Elements, it is versatile, able to take on some of the attributes of the others (to be clever, one could say it's a pale "shadow" of the other Elements); it can be solid and sharp like stone, malleable as water, wild as fire, or swift and ethereal as the wind; but at the same time he could not use it to light a lamp, or douse a flame. In combat, Kiwi attacks most often by manipulating his own shadow, able to give it form and substance, manifesting it as simple weapons, shields, or appendages.

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If he only has one then the shadow would have to be his Primary weapon. If its Secondary because you want to give him a new Primary later you can just move it down to Secondary at that point.

The limitless form-changing of the shadow into other tools would be too much like an ability. For now we will need it to have just one basic form or function of attack.

Dec 2, 2009 19:52:19 GMT -5 Twilight said:

Gravity
Manipulates the force of gravity in a limited area. Most often used to crush or repel foes, but can also be used to reduce gravity's pull to disorient enemies. At his current ability, its effects are limited to a 3' radius sphere around a targeted area.
Kiwi occasionally uses this power to allow himself to hover, providing greater maneuverability in combat.

Strength: Weak
Uses: Once per post; effects last until his next post. Must wait two posts to use again. Hovering can be turned on and off at will.

You can't have both hovering and area gravity control separate like that on a weak ability. I suggest making it so that if he uses it on the area around himself he can hover, but it counts as one of the uses with a cool down just like the others. Also, we need to know by what factor he can increase or decrease the gravity and how he targets an area so that we know it can be avoided fairly.

Dec 2, 2009 19:52:19 GMT -5 Twilight said:

Haste
Accelerates time to provide improved reflexes and movement speed. Kiwi will almost always maintain a low-level version of this spell on himself when forced into melee combat. More often he uses it to aid any allies that specialize in close combat when he's not being attacked directly himself.

Strength: Weak
Uses: Once per post; lasts for five posts, but can't be used again after it wears off for one post.

Again, we'll need its effect on him to be limited by the same 5 turn duration as it would be on other characters. Also please limit it to being active on one character at a time(For weak level) and increase the wait between casting to 5 turns after it wears off(basically equal to however long you want it to last). Also, please specify how much faster he can move. At this level I'd allow roughly twice as fast as normal.

Dec 2, 2009 19:52:19 GMT -5 Twilight said:

Rasp
Kiwi can disrupt the spellcasting of other magic-users. Usually, Kiwi doesn't go all-out, expending enough effort to simply try and throw a spell slightly off balance. If his timing is perfect, however, he can cause the spell to backfire on the caster.

Strength: Weak
Uses: Once per post; must wait three posts to use again. Delays a spell being cast for one post, and reduces the accuracy or effect of the spell once it's fired, giving it a 50% chance of missing/failing. There is also a 20% chance that the caster will take damage instead, and be effected by any negative statuses the spell might have induced.

How exactly do you determine this "chance outcome"? Also, a spell this powerful will need a larger cool down. 5 turns. In addition to this, delaying for one post AND reducing accuracy AND causing it to backfire sometimes is too much for a Weak ability. Please pick just one(I'd go with the delay, its very clever).

Dec 2, 2009 19:52:19 GMT -5 Twilight said:

Slow/Stop
Alters time around an enemy to slow its movements and reflexes, or freeze them entirely if enough energy is applied. Most effective if used against a single target, though temporarily slowing a group of enemies isn't too difficult; but Stop puts an immense strain on Kiwi to hold for more than a few seconds. Particularly large or strong-willed enemies can resist these spells' effects.

Strength: Moderate
Uses: Once per post; cannot be used again for three posts. Slow lasts for three rounds on multiple targets, or five rounds on one; Stop prevents a single target from taking an action for one post.

How does a character have the chance to dodge this? How do you decide if someone is strong-willed enough to resist it? Limit group effect of Slow to 3 targets max. Please increase cool down to 5 turns.

Dec 2, 2009 19:52:19 GMT -5 Twilight said:

especially due to the parallels many draw to the powers of Darkness (though in truth it is no more corrupt than any other Element, capable of being used for good or evil).

That isn't technically true in the KH Universe's cosmology. It can be used for good or evil but it IS naturally much more self-destructive than other powers. If you just mean as a magical element on his home world though then that's fine.

That's about all I would ask to change.
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[Twilight]

Sorry if Kiwi was a little overpowered; I don't have a good sense for what's balanced here. >_< I'm more accustomed to entirely freeform roleplaying. I'll make the necessary changes.

And yes, I'm referring to Shadow as an element in his homeworld's magical mythology. Omegan Shadow magic doesn't really have much in common with how the power of Darkness is used in Kingdom Hearts. He can't hurl crackling balls of energy, teleport, corrupt hearts, control the Heartless or what have you. I made it a secondary weapon partly because I do hope to have a Keyblade sometime down the road if it becomes possible, but also because Kiwi's Shadow can't be upgraded. When attacking, he forms it into claw-like blades and/or "tentacles" to slash and stab with, which is why I described it as appendages; the "shields" part is just meant to be an explanation for the innate ability Kiwi gets for picking the path of the guardian, and will be ruled by its effects and limitations. His Shadow doesn't actually take the shape of specific weapons/tools or anything; it's very amorphous and he can only will it into the most basic of forms.

With Gravity, I didn't think that the hovering part would be a big deal, as many characters seem to have the innate ability to just float around. He can't fly or anything with it, just hover maybe a half-foot max off the ground. Somewhat similar to the way Wisdom Form gets around in KH2. If that's still not okay, I'll make it a limited use of the spell, as you suggested.

For Haste, I did intend to have the duration the same if used on himself.

Regarding Rasp, I was just gonna use a dice-rolling website, unless you guys have the function built into the forum. However, as the random parts will be removed (at least until I get the chance to upgrade the ability to a stronger one, maybe?), it won't be an issue for now.

In the case of Slow/Stop, I assumed that if I was using it against another player or a player-controlled enemy, they would be the ones to decide if it were resisted/dodged regardless (goes for Gravity too). If it's necessary, I can describe some sort of visual phenomenon that appears at/around the targeted area just before the spell goes off. When used against enemies I control myself, I usually determine the success or failure of a critical attack/ability based on whatever outcome would be the most dramatic or best serve the current story/situation.

Thanks for the advice!

[Heroic Bilby]

Sorry if Kiwi was a little overpowered; I don't have a good sense for what's balanced here.

S'what I'm here for.

I made it a secondary weapon partly because I do hope to have a Keyblade sometime down the road if it becomes possible, but also because Kiwi's Shadow can't be upgraded.

Doesn't matter if you don't upgrade it, if its his only weapon its his primary one until you get something different.

When attacking, he forms it into claw-like blades and/or "tentacles" to slash and stab with, which is why I described it as appendages; the "shields" part is just meant to be an explanation for the innate ability Kiwi gets for picking the path of the guardian, and will be ruled by its effects and limitations. His Shadow doesn't actually take the shape of specific weapons/tools or anything; it's very amorphous and he can only will it into the most basic of forms.

Then please have it say so.

With Gravity, I didn't think that the hovering part would be a big deal, as many characters seem to have the innate ability to just float around.

I assume you mean in the game.

He can't fly or anything with it, just hover maybe a half-foot max off the ground. Somewhat similar to the way Wisdom Form gets around in KH2. If that's still not okay, I'll make it a limited use of the spell, as you suggested.

Please do.

For Haste, I did intend to have the duration the same if used on himself.

Please have it say so.

Regarding Rasp, I was just gonna use a dice-rolling website, unless you guys have the function built into the forum. However, as the random parts will be removed (at least until I get the chance to upgrade the ability to a stronger one, maybe?), it won't be an issue for now.

We don't be use randomly generated effects here at the moment, but as you say it's not an issue unless you upgrade, so please edit the ability accordingly.

In the case of Slow/Stop, I assumed that if I was using it against another player or a player-controlled enemy, they would be the ones to decide if it were resisted/dodged regardless (goes for Gravity too). If it's necessary, I can describe some sort of visual phenomenon that appears at/around the targeted area just before the spell goes off.

A visual phenomenon would be for the best.

[Twilight]

Profile edited.

On second thought, I think I'll just wait on hovering for now and get it later on as its own ability.

Is it alright that I left Slow/Stop with its original cooldown of 3 turns, as I've specified that it does not work on PCs and boss-type NPCs?

If there are any other concerns I need to address, please let me know.

[Heroic Bilby]

If its not something to use on PCs then you don't really need it to be an ability at all. If its for NPCs you could just slip it into the "Other" section. Free form RPing you can do whatever you want, these abilities are for when people wish to have formal guidelines to fight by.

So if you don't want it for formal PvP then you can use the AP for something else.

[Twilight]

Does that mean that if I'm not fighting against another PC, or if it's a battle where all those participating have agreed to go freeform, I don't have to be strict about adhering to listed cooldowns and what not?

[Heroic Bilby]

Quite.

[Twilight]

How's this iteration?

[Heroic Bilby]

It is good, but by Stop's 10' by 10' sphere do you mean 10 feet in radius or in diameter?

[Twilight]

Ah, I think I was thinking a square at first, but changed it to a sphere. Should be a 10' diameter sphere. I'll fix it.

[Heroic Bilby]

Approved, Locked and Moved.