Karen

[paradise4]

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~Basic info~

Behind every great individual, there is that voice which keeps them going onward and toward their next great adventure. [/center][/i]

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Username ~ : Paradise

Other characters ~ :No

Is this character canon? ~ :No

Link to audition thread ~ :

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~Character Info~

Waking up in the morning, your thoughts are cluttered. It takes a moment for you to fully become aware of your surroundings, but once you do, everything about your life comes back to you.[/center][/b][/i]

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Name ~ : Karen Rise

Age ~ : 17

Birthplace ~ : Eridas

Gender ~ : Female

Race ~ : Nobody

Special Class ~ :

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~Appearance~

As you are heading out the door of your house, a small glimmer of light catches your eye. You turn around and see a mirror, putting you face to face with your reflection.

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Physical appearance ~ : She stands at five foot and eight inches. Her hair is swept to one side of her face and stops around her chin. Her hair is as white as a shining star in the night sky. Her eyes are a very light blue. Her skin is a sickly pale and she has a tired expression. It looks as if her eyes are half open and her posture is also slightly hunched. Her head is always tilted to one side when standing still.

Clothing/Accessories ~ : She wears a black tank top that covers her stomach, skin tight black shorts that stop just above her knee. Tied around her body is a white hoodie that slightly droops lower that her shorts. Her shoes are also black with white laces and soles. On her neck is a ebony necklace with half of a silver heart piece and around her wrist is a very thick silver band that is cracked in many areas if looked at closely.

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~Personality~

As you're walking through the door, you see many sights that influence your mood. The different feelings that suddenly wash over you are many, leaving you with a strange mix of emotions.

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Alignment ~ : Evil

Behavior ~ : Karen acts very apathetic and says anything to put one is a bad mood, though she has a monotone voice she still has a silver tongue and rarely actually talks with anyone but other nobodies. She does not care of others and seeks to obtain power. Though she may look innocent, Karen would betray anyone to obtain what she desires. Karen is also a loner and hates making connections. Though she is capable of backstabbing she is honest to anyone who "befriends" and openly states that it is very likely that she will betray them if it is necessary.

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~Weapons~

Suddenly, a Heartless appears in front of you, brandishing its claws and threatening to attack. You reach for your weapon and equip it, ready to defend yourself.

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Primary Weapon(s)

ID: Broken Bracelet
Quality: Average

[Karen only wields broken weapons or broken objects such as jewelry or shields, mainly ones that have been shattered into multiple pieces. The shards of the weapon float and attack as a single unit, and most of the time it is whip like. Her weapons maintain the range of about nine feet and her opponent must be in eyesight for her to attack, unless she is using a special ability]

Secondary Weapon(s)

ID: None

[In this space please give a brief, physical description of the secondary weapon(s) your character wields]

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~Abilities~

Just as you're about to fight the creature, you feel the power of your ancestors filling you. The strength of a thousand men courses through your veins as you prepare for battle.

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AP left: 0

[Broken Burst]
[Karen stands stationary and her weapon begins to glow. It takes a physical or magical ability to stop her in the process. When the weapon glows it shatters into multiple shards and rapidly spins around Karen, if an opponent is near her during this time it causes major damage. It lasts for ten seconds at most and the range is about nine feet in a full three hundred sixty degree radius of where Karen is standing. Once she is finished Karen is weaponless for two posts.]

Strength: Moderate
Uses:Three times per battle and cool down is 6 posts

[Fragment Shot]
[Karen hold weapon up and points it to her opponent as her weapon begins to move sporadically. One of the fragment shoot toward her opponent causing minor damage. Her weapon is weakened for a short time until the shard reappears.]

Strength:Weak
Uses:Infinite, cool down two posts.

[Shattered Memories]
[Does not work on heartless. Karen's eyes begin to glow as she looks into the eyes of her opponent. The saddest and most horrific days of her enemy pour into her own mind. She uses these memories to taunt her opponent. This does no damage at all to her opponent and can easily be dodged by looking away from Karen's eyes. When she uses this ability bits and pieces of her own memory disappear, though it is small she uses this ability quite often. If this move is reflected by a mirror or mirror like surface she is stunned for a post.]

Strength:Weak
Uses:Can only be done once to any character after a successful use.

[Shattered Control]
[This ability allows Karen to control her weapon and make the pieces levitate. As she battles and becomes fatigued it becomes harder for Karen to keep the pieces under control. She controls individual pieces up to nine feet.]

Strength:Weak
Uses:Passive.

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Special Abilities

N/A


Minions

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Summons

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~History~

As you slay the last of the beasts, you put your weapon aside, and walk away, knowing your tale of bravery will be told for thousands of years to come.

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It seemed so long ago to Karen, but at the same time it was as if it happened yesterday and yet each time she tries to remember bits and pieces of her past are forgotten and lost forever. Eridas, the planet where she resided in the kingdom of Taliken. There her family served the kingdom, her mother by cooking the foods royalty ate and her father by leader the royal knights sworn to protect the peaceful kingdom.

Karen was the only child bared by her mother and father. Her mother could not have children easily and at first their family was saddened by not having a son to join the royal guard, but as Karen grew she wanted more than anything to please her father. She took to the sword and shield and trained harder than any of the other knights in training. By fifteen she could easily take on many of the veteran royal guards. Her father was proud to have her as a daughter.

Years passed by and Karen was now seventeen. She was now of age to be inaugurated into the royal guard. Sadly a week before the ceremony the stars int the night sky started to fade one by one and many dark shadows shot from the sky onto the Eridas. The royal guard guided all villagers inside the Castle as the tried to stave off the dark monsters. Karen was among them and stood witness to her father's demise. As Karen was fighting a rather large shadow appeared and was about to finish her, but her father pushed her out of the and he only had time to tell Karen to find her mother inside the castle.

Driven by fear she ran frantically inside the castle, as she went inside she was shocked to find the beasts made there way in long ago and with no one to protect anybody from inside the castle the villagers fell quickly. Karen went to find her mother chambers as tears filled her eyes. When she opened the door to her mother's room she screamed as she found nothing but the dark beings.

She started to attack as she was filled with rage she had never felt before. It was long before the monsters out numbered her. Once manged to break her weapon and she ran and found her self cornered, the only thing she found was her mother's wedding bracelet. She clenched it as she wished this was all a nightmare. She closed her eyes for the last time as a human.

When Karen awoke she found herself in an unknown area. On her wrist was a familiar bracelet. Memories rushed into her mind, but none of it phased her, though she felt as if she should be angry or mad. As she stood she promised her mother and father that she would one day return to that world and rid all evil from her world.

Karen found that she had new abilities upon her awake. As timed passed she found that the land she awoke in was Radiant Garden. She lived by herself and lived in the caverns where she practiced her skills on large rocks and crystals. She soon learned to live alone and grew to trust no one. She felt the light inside herself fade and began to think of what following light ever did for her. The only thing that kept her on the side of light was the promise she made to her family, but even that is slowly fading away. As time goes on Karen feels herself being lost to the darkness, but instead of fighting it she is starting to embrace it.

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~Class~

Before you embark on your journey a vision comes upon you. You see three weapons in front of you.

~ A sword of terrible destruction - The power of the warrior: Invincible courage.

~ A shield to repel all - The power of the guardian: Kindness to aid friends.

~ A staff of wonder and ruin - The power of the mystic: Inner strength.

You know that one of them must be chosen. What power will you seek?

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[The Sword]

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~Other~

[As Karen journeys on her humanity slowly goes away. Eventually she will forget her promise and become a being of evil.]

[seraph]

Hmm. Mainly just a weapon problem.

Having your weapon as a broken bracelet is an interesting one. The fact that they can move of they're own accord assuming they are controlled by Karen, needs to be an ability. I would suggest adding another Weak ability. This can be passive as long as they're is a range no longer than...shall we say no more than 9 feet?

Naturally you will have to compensate this by reducing the AP used in 'Broken Burst' as it has more AP than it really needs to be honest. The cooldown is really long and not exactly necessary but if you wish to change that, I would suggest no less than 6 posts and a few more uses.

The history is a little short for my liking but good enough.

So basically, you need to either reduce the AP on Broken Burst, or eliminate either of the other two abilities in order to have this ability with Karen's weapon moving as you have described.

Alternatively you could completely revamp the combat aspect of her but thats up to you entirely.

[paradise4]

Okay, changes made and history a little longer, though it is basically the same. Hope this is more to your liking.

[seraph]

It's amazing how one person can steal six hours of your time when you log on...

Anyway...

Everything is in order as far as I can tell. Thanks for extending the history. Really fleshes out your character more.

Accepted, Locked & Moved